So. Much. Bullshit. I dropped Bound by Faerie by W.B. McKay because of plot focus issues and tried to round out my quartet and just...kept fucking dropping them. I've almost completely lost faith in KU titles. It's almost like, if you can borrow it, it probably sucks.
Sin & Chocolate by K.F.Breene
Everything I hate about cheap romances written by inexperienced authors. They try to get you invested in a character but end up meandering for pages and pages, emphasizing unlikable qualities instead.
Mother of Shadows by Meg Anne
Mary Sue. The most beautiful, perfect gal getting trained to be an all-powerful queen, who makes the best decisions even when making a "mistake".
Sea of Darkness by Isadora Brown
If you open your novel with a fight scene then the pacing needs to match the sense of risk we feel for the character. You should refrain from slogging everything down with exposition in between over-explained maneuvers that leech the urgency from the prose. Just saying.
Shadow's Kiss by T.M. Hart
Fated to fuck with a twist. I don't like it as it is when two strangers feel uncontrollably or inexplicably drawn into each other's arms before they even have a real conversation. But this had the gal supposedly possessed by a demonic presence inside? So her "Mate" dislikes her yet seems to know she is meant for him. I dropped it because every interaction the two main characters had with anyone other than each other felt sloppy and cringe. Like any time they talk to anyone else, they're talking to cartoon characters.
Queen Takes Knights by Joely Sue Burkhart
This...is actually delicious smut, lol. Gal who's parents were killed by ghoulish monsters, spends her whole life running from the creatures only to get saved one night by two sexy vamp dudes. Apparently, she is a vampire "queen" not yet come awake and these two guys are unbonded knights. They've found her, they pledge to protect her, and then proceed to menage trois and drink and feed blood from each other. It's MFM porn.
Very dark and sultry...I might return to this if ever I need a bit of...ahem, "inspiration" one night.
After Darkness Falls by May Sage
i give you about 30-50 pages to hook me into your story. The first 20 pages is not the place to summarize your character's life up to current day. Thanks, I don't care.
Chosen By Darkness by E.M. Moore
Main girl is too stupid to live and too trusting of her kidnappers. It feels like, if they haven't reasonably convinced her and yet she barely puts effort into escape, that it's a contrivance to make the plot work. Very lazy.
Wild One by Donna Augustine
Omfg. Main character gets a brutal, graphic beating in the opening scene and not only fails to adequately defend herself while simultaneously taunting her attacker like a masochistic moron but she interjects in between dialogue and current action, rambling thoughts about everything under the sun: how little she gives a fuck, explaining the character of her attacker in detail, how much she wishes he were dead, how above everything she is now and what a "wild creature" she is inside, and how much it hurts to get her ass kicked. This isn't "bold and edgy". It's really dumb.
The Turning by Linda Watkins
Innocent Puritan teen becomes the local witch's apprentice. You lost me when the adult woman manipulates the girl into fucking her Hebrew boyfriend by using an illusion and fondling her to convince her how easy it is to fall into willing sexual feelings. You want to have the "safe sex" talk with your repressed and innocent teen charge, there are less gross and less duplicitous ways to do it.