Naked City OoC.

[MsBloom]

So this is where we will coordinate, organise and discuss plot and character ideas for The Naked City Chronicles.

Naked City - The Cast.

Name: Age: Species: Height/Weight: Gender Identity: (including preferred pronouns) Sexual Orientation: Profession: Distinguishing features: Which chapter of The Naked City Chronicles the character appears in: Kinks favoured by the character: Kinks favoured by the player: Biography: The Naked...

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These are the stories currently running:

The Naked City Chronicles Chapter 1 (reboot) - Your Favourite Nightmare

The Naked City Chronicles Chapter 1 - Your Favourite Nightmare Narrated by @Colonel_Liam Character: Player: Jane Marie, Jamie @MsBloom Spencer Purcell @SurreptitiousApple Dr. Lea Thomas @LeaT Kayce Lawton @InsaynePayne

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[MsBloom]

Posted and tagged @LeaT at the end. I'm thinking we can all do that at the end of each post as a reminder of who is next to post.

 

[MsBloom]

Night City immigrant

Surely you meant to write Naked City immigrant.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

Yup... thanks for the correction.

 

[InsaynePayne]

Oh crap, didn't realize everyone else before me had written their post; I'll get mine tonight. Sorry for the delay!

 

[MsBloom]

Oh crap, didn't realize everyone else before me had written their post;

Is there something we can do to help you know when it is your turn?

 

[MsBloom]

@InsaynePayne For the sake of continuity we'll skip over your introduction of Kayce until next round. Or you could feel free to add her in whenever you're ready.

 

[MsBloom]

@LeaT @Colonel_Liam try to remember to tag the next player to post at the end of your posts.

@SurreptitiousApple You are up next.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

Got it. Will work on a reply. I'll tag you next, if we're skipping over @InsaynePayne for now.

 

[MsBloom]

I'll tag you next, if we're skipping over @InsaynePayne for now.

I'd say tag us both to give @InsaynePayne a chance to jump in with their introduction post at any point.

I have been thinking though that perhaps Kayce is either running late or is already up at the gate house where the street kids hang out and sends Jamie a text to meet her there.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

Works for me.

 

[MsBloom]

@Colonel_Liam @SurreptitiousApple A small detail perhaps about the mention of Spencer hearing the same voice Jamie heard. Maybe it is just me but wouldn't it make more sense if it was only Jamie who could hear it (since I suspect it is of course not actually Su-Ji but the entity within the house calling out).

 

[MsBloom]

Then again. Having also read Lea's post It sort of makes sense somehow that they too would hear the voice. I'm now torn between the two because it still seems most logical to me that the house would target the intruders individually. Then again with Spencer all excited about the possibility of witnessing a haunting come to life and Lea's more annoyed scepticism it allows for a reason for all three of them to proceed to solve the mystery.

I think I'd like to call for a vote on this.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

From a "moving the action along" standpoint, it doesn't make a difference to me. Whether Spencer hears the voice or simply notices Jamie wandering off and calling after her friend, he's going to want to follow.

With regard to story-telling, I agree that individually targeting the intruders is most logical. I had assumed that to be the case given that @Colonel_Liam had asked for character fears and dreams. But it's so early and so close to the "entrance" that the house could conceivably be trying to draw all of them deeper inside, taking them past a point of no return before doing anything.

I can go either way. I might even say that our narrator should have the final word. But if you forced me to vote, I'd vote that they all hear the voice so that I don't have to rewrite anything

 

[LeaT]

I too can work either way and will defer to Liam as the narrator as my vote.

My only concern is that if our 3 'victims' aren't having a shared experience this can quickly turn into 3 stories for the narrator. I see a certain attraction to the 'who is she talking too' sort of vibe, but I also like my groups to stay groups and not pair off writing wise.

 

[MsBloom]

You are both making good points and I would assume this makes two votes for keeping the narrative as it is with the three of them sharing the experience of the disembodied voice.

I might even say that our narrator should have the final word.

Let's hear what his thoughts are and what his idea was behind having a voice call Jamie's name. @Colonel_Liam

 

[Colonel_Liam]

For what it's worth my intention was to only have Jamie hear the voice.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

@Colonel_Liam would you like me to edit or just chalk this up to a misunderstanding or miscommunication and continue on? I'm fine either way.

I'll also try to be better about asking if I ever feel like something is ambiguous.

 

[Colonel_Liam]

probably best just to cut it.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

Rewritten. Outcome is more or less the same.

 

[MsBloom]

We have two votes for keeping it as it is now, both with the addition that they both can work either way and one (I assume) for Jamie being the only one hearing the disembodied voice.

Personally while still thinking it is a narratively better idea to have the house targeting the intruders individually I am also starting to lean towards keeping it as it is because of the the reasons I gave earlier.

Also:

But it's so early and so close to the "entrance" that the house could conceivably be trying to draw all of them deeper inside, taking them past a point of no return before doing anything.

I have also been thinking is that if this is an attempt at separating the group by luring the guide away then I would prefer that to happen later, when their options of leaving the mansion are not as easy as they are in the current situation.

@Colonel_Liam would it work for you to keep things the way they are or did you have a further developed plan.

 

[Colonel_Liam]

Right now it's not so much an attempt to separate the group as to draw them in further to the house.

 

[MsBloom]

In that case I agree with Lea and Apple about their characters also hearing the voice. But to make it interesting they might all hear a different voice, each calling their name, rather than all of them hearing Su-Ji's voice calling Jamie's name.

 

[MsBloom]

@Colonel_Liam would you like me to edit or just chalk this up to a misunderstanding or miscommunication and continue on? I'm fine either way.

I'll also try to be better about asking if I ever feel like something is ambiguous.

probably best just to cut it.

Rewritten. Outcome is more or less the same.

To explain a bit of confusion in my own posts after these I must admit that I completely missed this exchange between the two of you.

For future reference I think we should all be in agreement before rewriting, unless it is minor details or relates to something that has already happened IC.

I don't see any real harm done to the story though, just that @LeaT also has to edit her post before writing her next post.

 

[SurreptitiousApple]

Sorry, my mistake. Given that @LeaT and I were both prepared to defer to our narrator, I had assumed that was a safe change. I'll wait for a more solid consensus next time.

FWIW, I have my previous writing still saved so it would be trivial to restore.

 

[LeaT]

I made an edit. I'm traveling so I just have my phone. Hopefully I didn't butcher it.