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After commenting on a few other threads here, I figured I'd throw my own hat in the ring and see if there's anything that can be improved about my RTs. Here's my latest one, mildly NSFW.

I'm primarily interested to hear what people think about the overall presentation: is there too much information, or too little? Is it easy to find the information you're looking for -- do you prefer full paragraphs with the important bits highlighted, or should I reformat e.g. the OOC section into an itemised list? Should I use spoilers in the pairings section, or remove the spoilers in the kinks section?

I'm aware that the subject matter itself is fairly niche, as is that of some of my older RTs (see also this one and this NSFW one), but evidently the formatting I use for them has become largely formulaic and I'm looking to see if there's anything I can improve about that formula.

Much thanks!
 
Hey, I read through your entire thread; I do really like the way it's laid out, it's aesthetically pleasing and I think it's good that you bolded the important terms so that they're more eye-catching.

As for suggestions, you could take the first paragraph and put it into bullet points instead. Something like:


Looking For
  • Yuri, FxF
    • Playing as and against cis female characters (negotiable)​
  • Smut-focused​
  • Short-term​
  • Established settings
    • No AUs​
  • Canon x Canon only
    • No Canon x OC or doubling​

You could do this with the OOC section as well. You don't need to remove the paragraphs you've already written, you can leave them in for further detail, but perhaps putting the shortened list above the more in-depth explanation will make it easier for people to immediately gauge if your interests are in line with theirs before they choose whether or not to continue reading.

Definitely keep the spoilers in the kinks section - as for the plots section it's okay with or without them, but if you have plans to make the plots any longer or add more information over time then by that point you would probably want to switch them over into spoilers.

One other thing that might need some clarification is which role you're wanting to play as in the listed fandoms. I didn't see you mention it anywhere, so maybe at the top of the fandoms section you should have a line that either says: "will play any of the characters" or "underlined character is my preferred role". Additionally, I would recommend including what your BDSM preference is: are you looking to play as a dom, sub, switch, or vanilla? For me personally, that's one of the first things I search for when determining whether I'll be compatible with someone, but I couldn't tell which one you were from the thread.

Overall, looks good! I think you have just about the right amount of information and touched on almost everything that would be important for people looking to make first contact with you. :)
 
At a Glance.
The images are adorable♡
Love the detail. It is a lot to read and digest.
I love it though♡

One critique - could be more reader friendly, and it's a long read (compared to 90% of RTs).
Example, some people are engaging and direct: @V-tubers R Us NBx Female - V-tubers are mindmeltingly hot... Let's pair them up with oversized "endowments"?~ (NSFW) But if that's not you're vibe, no worries.
So at this point, I would invest in a good table or code to reformat and combine all your pages/ideas to one RT.
I'm sure you've seen the beautiful designers on BM and their RTs.... It doesn't need to be as @Kitten Fx Male - ─♡ 𝓚𝔫𝔢𝔞𝔡𝔶 𝓚𝔦𝔱𝔱𝔢𝔫 ♡─ 🅽🆂🅵🆆 polished,
but i think it would make your RT easier to follow. Example: NBx F or NB - Monstorous Cravings & Prompts - Craving Anthros, Monsters, & Tentacles @The Quill

That's all.
Later, tater๑
 
Thanks for all the thoughtful input!

One other thing that might need some clarification is which role you're wanting to play as in the listed fandoms.
Good catch. Normally my request are especially kink-heavy, and I mention whether I'm looking to play a dom/sub/whatever in the very first paragraph, but since I'm more ambivalent in this case, I completely forgot about it. I'll try to find the best place to put that bit of information.

I'm sure you've seen the beautiful designers on BM and their RTs....
I'll admit I'm not a big fan of fancy typesetting/formatting myself, as it often ends up wonky on mobile/unusual aspect ratios, or is simply hard to read for people with weaker eyes (like me). Is there anything in particular you found hard to follow and could benefit from a different formatting?

At the moment I don't intend to merge all of my requests into one, because they're very craving-oriented and the cravings from my old threads have already been satisfied. I like to keep them around for archival purposes, but it'd get confusing if I absorb them into my active search thread.
 
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