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To keep it brief, my request thread has been getting little to absolutely no attention, and I'm wondering whether there's anything which could be improved on. I might receive a single Private Message every few weeks or so... but that's about it.

Here's the link: Mx Female - Original/Fandom prompts (NSFW)

So, yeah, that's about it. If you've got constructive criticisms of any kind, it'd be appreciated.
 
Formatting, my friend. Formatting. You've got 2157 words here and it shows 😅 A little bit of trickery can help people read through it, though. Here's my suggestion, cause you've got some great ideas here but people might be stopped by the wall of text.



Ah, hello there!


Nice to meet you, Potential Partner. Thank you for stopping by. Essentially, I'm creating this post to segue into writing a couple of interesting stories. They're based on the ideas I've been playing around with of late, and also involves various genres. If that sounds as if it'd be right up your alley, I hope you'd stick around to read this in a proper way (it might be better if I just high-side it, instead of rambling on...).

Expectations​
Favourites​
Hardcore Limits​
  • Post-length: I'm looking for an Advanced Literate partner. I'm a sucker for highly descriptive paragraphs written in vivid detail. I roleplay in the third person (past tense), and I'd require you to do the same. As far as how much I post, it depends on the scene in question. I'm not a huge fan of asking for a lot more than is required. But having said that, my replies range around 500-700 words per response. I might even write up to a thousand if inspired to.
    • In short, I hope you wouldn't give me anything less to work off of
  • God-modding: Don't indulge in it. It's self-explanatory, but I'd like to be the one that controls my character(s). I'm certainly open to sharing a few, but I'm referring to the main protagonists.
  • Pairing Preferences: Almost all of the prompts in this thread involve M x F pairings, but I'm open to F x F ones as well.
  • Duration: My responses might be quick, or it might take a week or so . I prefer to let my writing partners know if it could take longer. And while I can't say that I particularly like the idea of ghosting people, I know that it happens. If I don't receive a message for a couple of weeks, I'd probably check in to ask whether you're still interested. The lack of a response would result in me moving on.
  • Face-claims: To keep it brief, both animated and real-life images are welcomed. I'm pretty flexible regarding that.
  • Story/smut ratio: It mostly follows the ratio of 60/40. You may find that some of the prompts below don't leave any room for plot, while others do. A balance would be nice, wouldn't you say?
  • Rough sex
  • Incest
  • Dirty talking
  • Verbal Degradation
  • Cock worship
  • Fellatio/Cunnilingus
  • Orgasm denial
  • Missionary/doggystyle
  • Mind-control
Indifferent to
  • Cuckolding.
  • Non-consensual sex (the ones that exclude mind-controlling elements)
  • Voyeurism
  • Bondage(s) of any kind
  • Bathroom play
  • Foot fetish
  • Non-human characters
    • Catgirls, however, are a personal favourite if they're dominant in nature.

Oh, and you should know that I don't communicate off-site (even if it's just to plot). That's what the Private Messages on BlueMoon are for, after all.

There's just one last thing: if you reach out, I'd expect you to ensure that your message doesn't look as if it's been clearly copy-pasted. It's a huge buzzkill, and I'd ignore it. And it goes without saying, but no one-liners. I'd like to get a sense of who you are, and whether we'd mesh well together.

Also, I'd require a writing sample with your message (I'd be providing one myself, of course). It's just make sure that we'd be compatible.

(Notice: Favourite plots have been marked with an asterisk)

Horror
When sinister things lurk at starlight, whom can you trust?

• Muse A, a world-famous psychiatrist, has been consulted by a young woman (Muse B) who alleges that her sister is behaving strangely. Her temperament is erratic, and she's unusually violent towards others. Their family believes that she's been possessed, and wants to pay a visit to the local parish. However, A knows enough to figure out that it's likely to just be a mental condition. And yet, when he leaves his hospital in New York to travel across the country to have a look at the patient, he realizes that there's something in the case that he can't put his finger on. (*) [Sidenote: I'd prefer to set it in the Victorian era of the nineteenth century).

• Having decided to live together, two friends move into a huge mansion further away from their hometown. It's not long before they realize that the locality is a little unusual, or that their neighbours appear to be taking a lot of unnecessary interest in them. And while they explore the house later, they stumble across ancient secrets which were better left hidden. (*)

• The social outcast, Muse A has been bullied throughout his life, and is friendless. To his surprise, he once discovers a ruined and mysterious-looking box in Muse B's house while visiting her. There's a note pinned to it. It reads: "Make a wish-- if you dare." (*)

• Muse A is a scientist who's determined to bring his partner back from the dead. He approaches his colleague (Muse B), to help him clone the cadaver. They'd learn the repercussions of trying to play God soon enough.

• Despite his refusal to try and be friends with other children, Muse A's parents force him to make acquaintance of the new girl next door. She's really pretty, and yet he isn't sure that he likes the place. For one thing, he's never seen the family in daylight before, their teeth being a little too pointed. Of course, when the seventeen-year-old welcomes him with a seductive wink (accompanied by a lascivious lick of promise), he's hardly able to resist the temptation of trying to figure out more about them. (*)
Sci-Fi
Futuristic/mysterious worlds capture my attention like nothing else.

• Amidst the lightning strikes that engulf his hometown during a derecho, Muse A discerns something unusual in the sky. They look like winged, prehistoric creatures that appear to be searching for prey. A second later, he realizes that the fateful storm was just a dream. He receives a phone call from Muse B later: had he also read the government's report about a meteorite traveling through earth's atmosphere?

• The silence stretches on, and Muse A figures out that he's been left semi-conscious in a dark forest. As he's unsure as to how he'd got there, he bolts to his feet and runs headlong into Muse B. A voice informs them that they're trapped in an extremely realistic simulation.

• A malicious group of extraterrestrials invade the planet, using mind-control to subjugate humans and establish their dominance. Muse A, who realizes that he's immune to the threat, pairs up with his friend (Muse B) to try and figure a way out.
Incest
Sometimes, you'd need to break away from the monotony to have some highly juicy fun. And forbidden ones at that.

• Muse A is relieved to have his parents out of the house for a day. Having chosen to spend most of his time online, he boots up his computer and visits a Chatroulette. Soon enough, he's paired with an unfamiliar girl and gets it off. As the minutes tick by, however, his attention is drawn towards the paraphernalia in her room he could see. Which looks suspiciously like her older sister's.

• After being gifted a strange instrument that allows him to manipulate the minds of whoever he wants to, Muse A decides to have some fun with his family. (*)
Fantasy
This isn't among the list of my absolute favourites. Naturally, I've got only two specific ideas for it.

• A knight (Muse A) works under the rule of a powerful monarch. And when a sorcerer plans to kidnap one of the King's daughters (Muse B) to perform a strange ritual, it's up to him to protect her.

• A voyager on a drowning ship, Muse A has developed amnesia. He was rescued from the sea by a mysterious figure that he later finds out is a gorgeous mermaid. Would he be able to figure out what exactly had happened before he lost his senses?
Fandom
Harry Potter
I'd expect you to be well-versed in the original books for this one.

Pairings: Harry x Hermione, Ron x Hermione, Draco x Hermione, Harry x Cho, etc. I wouldn't use Original Characters for this fandom.

• Harry x Hermione: A few months after getting abandoned during the Horcrux hunt, the War rages on between the remaining members of the Golden Trio. And yet Harry has thoughts he wouldn't dare to confess to his own soul . (*)

• Ron x Hermione: Post-Hogwarts, Ron Weasley is suffering from nightmares. However, he's disquieted when he figures out that all of them appear to be coming true. And when he has a brief (and yet vivid) vision of Hermione getting attacked during the night by a familiar figure, he knows she'd have to be protected by any means possible. (*)

• Draco x Hermione: Working at the Ministry of Magic with his colleague Hermione Granger is certainly a tall older. Although he tries his best to be civil, Draco hasn't entirely gotten rid of his prejudices yet. During a brief stint at her office, he sneaks a look into the witch's Pensieve and figures out what she really used to think of him back at school. (*)

• Draco x Hermione: The war's at a stalemate, neither side emerging as the victor. Meanwhile, the Golden Trio are nowhere near to locating all the Horcruxes. Hermione thinks back to her time at Malfoy Manor, and finally clutches on a straw that could be their last hope. Based on a conversation she'd overheard between Bellatrix and Draco Malfoy, the latter might be privy to certain information. She Polyjuices herself as his girlfriend (Daphne Greengrass) to attend a ceremony thrown by one of the senior Death Eaters and worm it out of the boy.

• Harry x Ginny: The magical world is under the threat of a "Vampire's Association" that aims to subjugate wizards/muggles, and establish their dominance over them. Harry, as an Auror, is tasked with rounding all of them up. During a weekly visit to The Burrow, however, a few of the vampires infiltrate the house to try and put him out of action. In the fight that ensues, Ginny Weasley gets bitten [Alternatively, it could be a Harry x Hermione pairing). (*)

• Harry x Cho: After the war, Harry makes the decision to travel to the United States to get over his malaise and put everything out of his head. Much to his surprise, he realizes that Cho Chang would be accompanying him in the journey.

• Draco x Hermione: Post-war, the Malfoys have fallen into disrepute. Draco Malfoy has had face to watch his parents being carted off to Azkaban (he was himself spared on the grounds that he was below seventeen while joining the Dark lord), aside from facing mockery by the rest of the wizarding world. It was with a sense of surprise, therefore, that he'd reacted when Ron Weasley once invited him over to The Burrow for Christmas Eve. It doesn't take him long to hatch up a plan to use a bottle of Amortentia, and make the Muggleborn girl consider him in a way she never had before.

• Harry/Draco x multiple girls: A much more smut-centered scenario, it would revolve around either of the characters concocting a slightly different kind of Amortentia in their fifth/sixth year (it's effects include building up an extreme sense of lust/attraction inside the person who consumes it). And soon enough, many of the young women at Hogwarts can't help but succumb to those primal instincts.



Pokémon

Pairings: Ash x Misty, Ash x Serena, Serena x May, etc.

I can't think of a lot of ideas at the moment, but I'd be open to working something out together. Again, I'd be unlikely to use Original Characters unless the plot's really interesting. The characters would be in their mid-to-late teens.

• Ash x Misty: After managing to win a Pokémon League, Ash Ketchum returns to Pallet Town to realize that his former companion has been abducted by Team Rocket.

• Ash x Serena: In the course of their journey, Ash and Serena meet a Professor who believes that the legendries in Kalos are likely to be in danger.

• Ash x May: On the pursuit to achieve yet another gym badge, Ash. and co are surprised to learn about an organization called 'Team Magma/Aqua', who are supposedly involved in researching the ancient Pokémon of the Hoenn region.


Well, that's about all I've got to say for now. Hit me up if you're interested!​



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[H3][INDENT][SIZE=5][I]Ah[/I], hello there![/SIZE][/INDENT][/H3]

Nice to meet you, Potential Partner. Thank you for stopping by. Essentially, I'm creating this post to segue into writing a couple of interesting stories. They're based on the ideas I've been playing around with of late, and also involves various genres. If that sounds as if it'd be right up your alley, I hope you'd stick around to read this in a proper way (it might be better if I just high-side it, instead of rambling on...).

[TABLE]
[TR]
[TH][CENTER]Expectations[/CENTER][/TH]

[TH][CENTER]Favourites[/CENTER][/TH]

[TH][CENTER]Hardcore Limits[/CENTER][/TH]
[/TR]
[TR]
[TD][LIST]
[*][B]Post-length[/B]: I'm looking for an Advanced Literate partner. I'm a sucker for highly descriptive paragraphs written in vivid detail. I roleplay in the third person (past tense), and I'd require you to do the same. As far as how much I post, it depends on the scene in question. I'm not a huge fan of asking for a lot more than is required. But having said that, my replies range around 500-700 words per response. I might even write up to a thousand if inspired to.
[LIST]
[*][I]In short, I hope you wouldn't give me anything less to work off of[/I]
[/LIST]
[*][B]God-modding:[/B] Don't indulge in it. It's self-explanatory, but I'd like to be the one that controls my character(s). I'm certainly open to sharing a few, but I'm referring to the main protagonists.
[*][B]Pairing Preferences: [/B]Almost all of the prompts in this thread involve M x F pairings, but I'm open to F x F ones as well.
[*][B]Duration: [/B]My responses might be quick, or it might take a week or so . I prefer to let my writing partners know if it could take longer. And while I can't say that I particularly like the idea of ghosting people, I know that it happens. If I don't receive a message for a couple of weeks, I'd probably check in to ask whether you're still interested. The lack of a response would result in me moving on.
[*][B]Face-claims: T[/B]o keep it brief, both animated and real-life images are welcomed. I'm pretty flexible regarding that.
[*][B]Story/smut ratio:[/B] It mostly follows the ratio of 60/40. You may find that some of the prompts below don't leave any room for plot, while others do. A balance would be nice, wouldn't you say?
[/LIST][/TD]

[TD][LIST]
[*]Rough sex
[*]Incest
[*]Dirty talking
[*]Verbal Degradation
[*]Cock worship
[*]Fellatio/Cunnilingus
[*]Orgasm denial
[*]Missionary/doggystyle
[*]Mind-control
[/LIST]
[TABLE]
[TR]
[TH]Indifferent to[/TH]
[/TR]
[TR]
[TD][LIST]
[*]Cuckolding.
[*]Non-consensual sex (the ones that exclude mind-controlling elements)
[*]Voyeurism
[/LIST][/TD]
[/TR]
[TR]
[TD][/TD]
[/TR]
[/TABLE][/TD]

[TD][LIST]
[*]Bondage(s) of any kind
[*]Bathroom play
[*]Foot fetish
[*]Non-human characters
[LIST]
[*] Catgirls, however, are a personal favourite if they're dominant in nature.
[/LIST]
[/LIST]

[I]Oh, and you should know that I don't communicate off-site (even if it's just to plot). That's what the Private Messages on BlueMoon are for, after all.[/I][/TD]
[/TR]
[/TABLE]

There's just one last thing: if you reach out, I'd expect you to ensure that your message doesn't look as if it's been clearly copy-pasted. It's a huge buzzkill, and I'd ignore it. And it goes without saying, but no one-liners. I'd like to get a sense of who you are, and whether we'd mesh well together.

[FONT=georgia][COLOR=rgb(84, 172, 210)][I]Also, I'd require a writing sample with your message (I'd be providing one myself, of course). It's just make sure that we'd be compatible.[/I][/COLOR][/FONT]

[SIZE=2](Notice: Favourite plots have been marked with an asterisk)[/SIZE]

[ACCORDION=BCENTER][SLIDE=Horror|CENTER][I]When sinister things lurk at starlight, whom can you trust?[/I]

• Muse A, a world-famous psychiatrist, has been consulted by a young woman (Muse B) who alleges that her sister is behaving strangely. Her temperament is erratic, and she's unusually violent towards others. Their family believes that she's been possessed, and wants to pay a visit to the local parish. However, A knows enough to figure out that it's likely to just be a mental condition. And yet, when he leaves his hospital in New York to travel across the country to have a look at the patient, he realizes that there's something in the case that he can't put his finger on. (*) [Sidenote: I'd prefer to set it in the Victorian era of the nineteenth century).

• Having decided to live together, two friends move into a huge mansion further away from their hometown. It's not long before they realize that the locality is a little unusual, or that their neighbours appear to be taking a lot of unnecessary interest in them. And while they explore the house later, they stumble across ancient secrets which were better left hidden. (*)

• The social outcast, Muse A has been bullied throughout his life, and is friendless. To his surprise, he once discovers a ruined and mysterious-looking box in Muse B's house while visiting her. There's a note pinned to it. It reads: "Make a wish-- if you dare." (*)

• Muse A is a scientist who's determined to bring his partner back from the dead. He approaches his colleague (Muse B), to help him clone the cadaver. They'd learn the repercussions of trying to play God soon enough.

• Despite his refusal to try and be friends with other children, Muse A's parents force him to make acquaintance of the new girl next door. She's really pretty, and yet he isn't sure that he likes the place. For one thing, he's never seen the family in daylight before, their teeth being a little too pointed. Of course, when the seventeen-year-old welcomes him with a seductive wink (accompanied by a lascivious lick of promise), he's hardly able to resist the temptation of trying to figure out more about them. (*)[/SLIDE]
[SLIDE=Sci-Fi|CENTER][I]Futuristic/mysterious worlds capture my attention like nothing else.[/I]

• Amidst the lightning strikes that engulf his hometown during a derecho, Muse A discerns something unusual in the sky. They look like winged, prehistoric creatures that appear to be searching for prey. A second later, he realizes that the fateful storm was just a dream. He receives a phone call from Muse B later: had he also read the government's report about a meteorite traveling through earth's atmosphere?

• The silence stretches on, and Muse A figures out that he's been left semi-conscious in a dark forest. As he's unsure as to how he'd got there, he bolts to his feet and runs headlong into Muse B. A voice informs them that they're trapped in an extremely realistic simulation.

• A malicious group of extraterrestrials invade the planet, using mind-control to subjugate humans and establish their dominance. Muse A, who realizes that he's immune to the threat, pairs up with his friend (Muse B) to try and figure a way out.[/SLIDE]
[SLIDE=Incest|CENTER][I]Sometimes, you'd need to break away from the monotony to have some highly juicy fun. And forbidden ones at that.[/I]

• Muse A is relieved to have his parents out of the house for a day. Having chosen to spend most of his time online, he boots up his computer and visits a Chatroulette. Soon enough, he's paired with an unfamiliar girl and gets it off. As the minutes tick by, however, his attention is drawn towards the paraphernalia in her room he could see. Which looks suspiciously like her older sister's.

• After being gifted a strange instrument that allows him to manipulate the minds of whoever he wants to, Muse A decides to have some fun with his family. (*)[/SLIDE]
[SLIDE=Fantasy|CENTER][I]This isn't among the list of my absolute favourites. Naturally, I've got only two specific ideas for it.[/I]

• A knight (Muse A) works under the rule of a powerful monarch. And when a sorcerer plans to kidnap one of the King's daughters (Muse B) to perform a strange ritual, it's up to him to protect her.

• A voyager on a drowning ship, Muse A has developed amnesia. He was rescued from the sea by a mysterious figure that he later finds out is a gorgeous mermaid. Would he be able to figure out what exactly had happened before he lost his senses?[/SLIDE]
[SLIDE=Fandom|CENTER]
[SIZE=5]Harry Potter[/SIZE]
[I]I'd expect you to be well-versed in the original books for this one.[/I]

Pairings: Harry x Hermione, Ron x Hermione, Draco x Hermione, Harry x Cho, etc. I wouldn't use Original Characters for this fandom.

• Harry x Hermione: A few months after getting abandoned during the Horcrux hunt, the War rages on between the remaining members of the Golden Trio. And yet Harry has thoughts he wouldn't dare to confess to his own soul . (*)

• Ron x Hermione: Post-Hogwarts, Ron Weasley is suffering from nightmares. However, he's disquieted when he figures out that all of them appear to be coming true. And when he has a brief (and yet vivid) vision of Hermione getting attacked during the night by a familiar figure, he knows she'd have to be protected by any means possible. (*)

• Draco x Hermione: Working at the Ministry of Magic with his colleague Hermione Granger is certainly a tall older. Although he tries his best to be civil, Draco hasn't entirely gotten rid of his prejudices yet. During a brief stint at her office, he sneaks a look into the witch's Pensieve and figures out what she really used to think of him back at school. (*)

• Draco x Hermione: The war's at a stalemate, neither side emerging as the victor. Meanwhile, the Golden Trio are nowhere near to locating all the Horcruxes. Hermione thinks back to her time at Malfoy Manor, and finally clutches on a straw that could be their last hope. Based on a conversation she'd overheard between Bellatrix and Draco Malfoy, the latter might be privy to certain information. She Polyjuices herself as his girlfriend (Daphne Greengrass) to attend a ceremony thrown by one of the senior Death Eaters and worm it out of the boy.

• Harry x Ginny: The magical world is under the threat of a "Vampire's Association" that aims to subjugate wizards/muggles, and establish their dominance over them. Harry, as an Auror, is tasked with rounding all of them up. During a weekly visit to The Burrow, however, a few of the vampires infiltrate the house to try and put him out of action. In the fight that ensues, Ginny Weasley gets bitten [Alternatively, it could be a Harry x Hermione pairing). (*)

• Harry x Cho: After the war, Harry makes the decision to travel to the United States to get over his malaise and put everything out of his head. Much to his surprise, he realizes that Cho Chang would be accompanying him in the journey.

• Draco x Hermione: Post-war, the Malfoys have fallen into disrepute. Draco Malfoy has had face to watch his parents being carted off to Azkaban (he was himself spared on the grounds that he was below seventeen while joining the Dark lord), aside from facing mockery by the rest of the wizarding world. It was with a sense of surprise, therefore, that he'd reacted when Ron Weasley once invited him over to The Burrow for Christmas Eve. It doesn't take him long to hatch up a plan to use a bottle of Amortentia, and make the Muggleborn girl consider him in a way she never had before.

• Harry/Draco x multiple girls: A much more smut-centered scenario, it would revolve around either of the characters concocting a slightly different kind of Amortentia in their fifth/sixth year (it's effects include building up an extreme sense of lust/attraction inside the person who consumes it). And soon enough, many of the young women at Hogwarts can't help but succumb to those primal instincts.

[HR=1][/HR]

[SIZE=5]Pokémon[/SIZE]

Pairings: Ash x Misty, Ash x Serena, Serena x May, etc.

I can't think of a lot of ideas at the moment, but I'd be open to working something out together. Again, I'd be unlikely to use Original Characters unless the plot's really interesting. The characters would be in their mid-to-late teens.

• Ash x Misty: After managing to win a Pokémon League, Ash Ketchum returns to Pallet Town to realize that his former companion has been abducted by Team Rocket.

• Ash x Serena: In the course of their journey, Ash and Serena meet a Professor who believes that the legendries in Kalos are likely to be in danger.

• Ash x May: On the pursuit to achieve yet another gym badge, Ash. and co are surprised to learn about an organization called 'Team Magma/Aqua', who are supposedly involved in researching the ancient Pokémon of the Hoenn region.[/SLIDE][/ACCORDION]

[CENTER]Well, that's about all I've got to say for now. Hit me up if you're interested![/CENTER]
 
To keep it brief, my request thread has been getting little to absolutely no attention, and I'm wondering whether there's anything which could be improved on. I might receive a single Private Message every few weeks or so... but that's about it.

Here's the link: Mx Female - Original/Fandom prompts (NSFW)

So, yeah, that's about it. If you've got constructive criticisms of any kind, it'd be appreciated.

I think your thread is good... maybe I'd put the technicalities after your favorite scenarios. A visitor should see immediately if her interests are compatible with yours.
 
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