A Kitsune's Misery (Haiku's)

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Ok so how many people here understand the definition of a haiku?
If you say its a 5-7-5 syllable poem than sorry you failed.
A true haiku follows those rules but to make it a Haiku it has to involve nature somehow, some aspect of nature, either human or earthly.
I will post Haiku's on here either daily/hourly/ or weekly, depends on how many I want to write.
Here are the first, please credit/give some insight on whatcha think of them alright?

Winds that rend the heart
Ice that freezes every mind
Fire that cleans souls

Deaths cold grasp claims me
her fingers claw at my soul
I am her play toy

A warriors creed
A sword shed with so much blood
Is he a free man?

 

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Blood that weeps forth now
Her gaze still locked into mine
My lover taken

Hath God forsaken?
Hath his might been taken now?
is it only me?

any comments?

 

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Deaths wings spread open
caught in her shade is a man
In that man I see

Harrowed by the king
exiled from the prince of shades
Where do I belong?

 

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Blossoms falling down
their sweet scent left in the air
is she really gone?

 

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A thousand birds weep
A thousand bees shed no tears
Is the flower pure?


Banished by my God
Accepted by my Mother
A shaman I am

God does not want me
Lucifer denies my soul
Death has taken me

A shade of my past
She haunts me like winter's bite
When will I be free?

 

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A wolf howls at her
her beauty easily gone now
my moon was taken

 

[Intangible]

Hey these are really good! Thumbs up!